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when we're together
dusk is containable; the moon in my palms
and the stars on your ceiling.

we lull the city to sleep
with our theories of life; my tongue curling
into speech.

do you remember,
when Jupiter was a silver wick, lighting its countless moons?

that night,
you balanced a cigarette off your lips,
and I watched the vermillion flame burn life
as a newborn sun;

stars forming,
planets moulding and constellations snaked
above our eyes.

i imagined
what it would be like to be curled
inside the embers – creator and destroyer
of worlds,
so close to your lips.
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^Beccalicious Feb 20, 2013  Professional Writer
There's a few places where you really tighten up those stanza's by cutting away some of the unnecessary words, but all in all the language is beautiful :)
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~AMWeitz Feb 19, 2013  Student Writer
Holy shit.
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this is shimmering♥
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~HippieHebe Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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*toxic-nebulae Nov 6, 2012  Student Writer
this has been featured here: [link]
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~HippieHebe Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!:heart::heart:
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*toxic-nebulae Nov 6, 2012  Student Writer
:hug: of course.
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*toxic-nebulae Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
oh I love this.
when Jupiter was a silver wick, lighting its countless moons?
...amazing. :heart:
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~HippieHebe Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
played around with that line a bit until i was satisfied. thank you! :heart:
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