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i knew a girl once,
with an oak heart and guarded hands
(gloved from touch)

but she
uncrossed her ankles,

let naked fingertips
touch well-read lips, and

her heart kind of turned
into ash.

i miss that girl,
with the oak heart -

she was tougher.



Thank you so much for the DD!!! Would never have expected it.
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Given 2013-09-11
Oak by ~HippieHebe is a beautiful poem with a strong impact. ( Suggested by Kida-neechan and Featured by DorianHarper )
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ActsofArt Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely and so well expressed congrats on the DD!
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   General Artist
congratulations on the DD, dolly :love:
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, dear! :heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Student Writer
"let naked fingertips 
touch well-read lips, and 

her heart kind of turned
into ash." :heart: 


this is beautiful. congratulations on the DD! :love:
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:iconhippiehebe:
HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much:heart:
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DaSh-MiEsTeR Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013  Student Artist
Great inspiration for words or shall I say 'lack of words' but still providing the necessary detail to influence deeeeep emotions. Wow :)
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you very much :heart:
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amrgalal7 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully expressed :love:
And what an impact! :faint:
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:iconhippiehebe:
HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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amrgalal7 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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Litriu Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

An Impervious substance doesn't need to be strong. As you lose your strength, you gain imperviousness...

 

Fantastic work.

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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
intresting thought, thank you :heart:
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Litriu Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're quite welcome.
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doldydo Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
perhaps... she'll become tougher -if she chooses to. :)

Anyway great job :nod:
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Perhaps... Thank you :heart:
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analillithbar Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't think less of her... just try to understand: You are never too old to be put in a bad position, and make the matter worse by going with the flow. You suggest she was "tougher" before... Perhaps, now her bark is thicker. 

Well-written, and heart-wrenching, that's for sure.
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your input :) :heart:
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analillithbar Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You bet. Thank you for writing something so close to home and having the guts to share with the world. :iconlovesplatplz:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013   Writer
Glad to see this one featured!  Congrats!
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:iconhippiehebe:
HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Kida-neechan Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013
Congratulations on the DD :giggle:
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
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Kida-neechan Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
Your welcome :dummy: :heart: :dummy:
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TwinOfTwins Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful! *O* I read the title and I was immediately hooked! Amazing job! This is definitely one of the best poems I've ever read!
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, that is the best compliment I've recieved :heart:
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TwinOfTwins Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! And thank you for the inspiration! :D
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013
:love: Quality continues to rise to the top like delectable cream, Ms D!
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, thank you, dear! :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
:nod: A pleasure! :heart:
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paweldaruk Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013
Excellent work and beautiful thoughts.
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:iconhippiehebe:
HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is lovely. Congrats on the DD. :)
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my journal :)
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, thank you very much :heart: It means a lot!
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OurBraveHeroine Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013   Writer
Beautifully written :heart: And I definitely think I can relate at the moment
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, dear :heart:
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OurBraveHeroine Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013   Writer
You're welcome :heart:
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